Afraid of Whales
February 4, 2011
It’s a wordle prompt this week! I genuinely thought I wasn’t going to make it but I scraped in at the last second. I didn’t use all the words. If I had, it would have been a “killer” poem entitled: Stab! Stab! Stab! Instead, it’s a poem about a friend who is moving out of home. She had a dream where her boat was sinking, but she didn’t want to be in the water because she was scared of the whales. Once I stopped laughing at her whale phobia, I realised it fit nicely with her current situation.
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February 4, 2011 at 6:43 pm
You’re so clever. I really love it.
February 4, 2011 at 6:46 pm
Awesome :)
Don’t stop feeding me strange dreams, they’re great inspiration!
February 4, 2011 at 8:33 pm
A yummy one, made me laugh as well as tremble at the fear of whales.
February 4, 2011 at 8:35 pm
If they had big sharp teeth I might be convinced to be afraid… :)
February 4, 2011 at 10:20 pm
I like this one! Swim Free!
February 4, 2011 at 10:55 pm
Haha! Thanks Jeanne :)
February 5, 2011 at 1:39 am
I loved it…!!
tears of the sky fall to the ground
February 6, 2011 at 9:51 am
Thanks Gautami!
February 5, 2011 at 2:28 am
There’s such tenderness here – like the speaker is soothing a child. Very nice.
February 6, 2011 at 9:56 am
Thanks Donna :)
February 5, 2011 at 3:06 am
Joanne, I love poems about the sea.
Whales are magnificent creatures.
February 6, 2011 at 9:57 am
Thanks Pamela. Whales are very beautiful, it’s true.
February 5, 2011 at 6:41 am
Powerful and beautifully written.
February 6, 2011 at 9:57 am
Thank you Laurie :)
February 5, 2011 at 9:00 am
I enjoyed that!
February 6, 2011 at 9:57 am
Thanks Mad Kane!
February 5, 2011 at 9:49 am
An intriguing piece – it fits so many areas! Very well done.
February 6, 2011 at 9:58 am
Thanks Tumblewords :)
February 5, 2011 at 5:47 pm
Ah, now this is a pleasure.
(but I’d still like to read “Stab, Stab, Stab”)
February 6, 2011 at 9:58 am
…and I’d still like to write it :) One day…
February 5, 2011 at 6:13 pm
Very effective – the sustained metaphor carries the words really well.
February 6, 2011 at 9:59 am
Thank you Dick :)
February 5, 2011 at 11:59 pm
It’s a streak of really good work this week. You are part of it. I’m happy reading today.
February 6, 2011 at 10:00 am
Thanks Christopher. I haven’t had a chance to read many of the others yet but I’m about to, and am especially looking forward to it now!
February 6, 2011 at 3:41 am
While I too would like to read “Stab Stab Stab”, you’re right that the Wordle lent itself to violence this time… the poem was much cleaner from the selective trimming of words. Well done. :)
February 6, 2011 at 10:01 am
Thanks Joseph! I think that’s why it took me so long to write it; I wanted to do something different but my mood coincided too strongly with the more obvious theme :)
February 6, 2011 at 8:49 am
A beautifully affirming poem for your friend, and us. Thank you!
February 6, 2011 at 10:01 am
Thanks, Deb :)
February 6, 2011 at 10:26 am
What a wonderful poem this is! Absolutely love it. Great message.
February 6, 2011 at 4:17 pm
Thanks Nan!
February 7, 2011 at 12:19 am
I am intrigued by the dreams we have when we are going through big changes – the metaphors our subconscious comes up with. I think you did a beautiful job expressing the core message. I especially like the line “with glittering voices spread across/ a soul of immense depth.”
February 8, 2011 at 8:35 am
Thanks Kelly! Dreams are fascinating creatures, I can’t wait for technology to advance far enough so we can record them!
February 7, 2011 at 8:09 am
Love it!
February 8, 2011 at 8:36 am
Thanks Twitches!
February 8, 2011 at 8:09 am
Joanne, sorry I am late responding here. Time got away; but I visited your poem today and found it intriguing and I like what you did with the wordle. Seamless writing. One wouldn’t have known it was a wordle. So very touching!
February 8, 2011 at 8:37 am
Thanks Mary! Wordles can be quite tricky.
March 22, 2011 at 4:05 am
Very good, wish I had that knack!
March 22, 2011 at 9:21 am
Thanks Toemailer :)